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Law and Steel. (1 Viewer)

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*Setting*

Takes place in Arizona.

SET A: Rich and Glenn's apartment.
+Props: Kurt Warner Jersey

*Characters*

Glenn Mahoney-- Lawyer, 24 -- From colorado --adjusting to life in the city-- (BadAss) like glenn guhlia but likeable, plays guitar. Selfish at times.

+Kim Mahoney , lives in Colorado (Bryan)
+Drives an Audi R8.

Rich Kelpin-- Construction, 23 Lives in Arizona--Kurt Warner Enthusist, dances. Owner of Kelpin and Son's construction. NFL Guy,
"always about the game".

Ronny-- Manager of Gas station, 46 --Has medical marujuna card (sells) Has a Daughter. "nothing is to good for my baby girl"

Lucmar-- Awkward black man -- "Fresh Prince" Friends with Glenn. Lucmar gets job at Rich's construction site.

Amber Andrews-- Pharmist tech, 24 Dirty Blonde hair and smart. --Cocaine-- Maniplutive. Has own apartment with jacuzzi.

Margaret-- Borderline attractive, cleans up nice. flaunts boobs "wet floor sign"

*WORKERS AT GLENN'S WORK*

Bridgette Reynolds-- Registration. (Hot piece of ###)
Lyle Nolan-- Kind of crazy, but successful.

*Workers at Rich's Work*

Lucmar
Bubba- Big black guy,
Felipe

EPISODE LIST

Episode 1: Glenn and Rich move in.

SCENE 1: Apartment

+Dialogue about items that they're unpacking / have unpacked.
-Kurt Warner jersey

+Smoke comes out of Glenn's room, nothing's mentioned.
+Glenn and Rich talk about the housewarming party

SCENE 2: Convenience Store

Glenn goes to the the convenience store to pick up items and snacks for the party. Ronny leaves daughter at register. Ronny gives package to glenn , also as glenn invites him to the party.

SCENE 3: AT THE PARTY

GUESTLIST: Glenn, Rich, Ronnie, Amber, Bridgette, Margaret, Lucmar (with random black girl "Date")

At the party, Ronnie and Amber really hit it off and start to develop a friendship. They bond over Ronnie's daughter, strictly platonic.

Ronnie leaves early.

SCENE 4: WAKING UP, DRUNK

Amber leaves jacket at the apartment. Glenn and Rich argue who brings it to the Pharmacy.

SCENE 5: LAWFIRM

*Glenn and Lyle have conversation at work, some hostility is present. Lyle is a #### to Glenn and then walks away with Bridgette.*

SCENE 6: Ronnie's Convenience Store

Ronnie grills Glenn over his grudge against Lyle. Showing him that he was really doing the same thing as Lyle, getting upset over Bridgette while fighting over Amber with Glenn. How's he different from Lyle?

*Chicken Pot Pie joke.*

SCENE 7: Pharmacy

Glenn drops off the jacket at ambers pharmacy. Amber is gracious for the return of the jacet. Glenn invites amber out for drinks, but only to find out that amber has plans with lyle.

SCENE 8: The Appartment

Glenn comes home to find rich watching T.V drinking a beer. Glenn is visibly upset. Glenn explains the situation to rich. Glenn then askes rich what is left for us? suddenly the door bell rings and margret is at the door.

SCENE 9: In the car/Pharmacy

Rich is parked at the pharmacy in his car giving himself a pep talk.

SCENE 10: Rich's worksite

"Felipe, gotta run. You can take the wheel from here, right?"
"Si."

Rich leaves in a hurry and Felipe stands awkwardly.

"I'm just gonna stack these rocks."

 
Is this some sort of attempt to discuss your next path to being a millionaire which is about writing a sitcom?

 
Okay, if you're going to write a script, it's going to be about a guy who stocks shelves at Walgreens and is working toward being a stock broker. There should be a magical talisman involved (likely the chip he didn't gamble when he realized he had a gambling problem, keeping this $1 casino chip as a reminder) which he now keeps in his pocket. He is unbelievably lucky now, precisely because he no longer gambles. He is never, ever wrong with a stock tip, provided he receives no gain whatsoever from it. If he has any skin in the game, he is always dead wrong.

It is titled "Stock Boy."

 
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Okay, if you're going to write a script, it's going to be about a guy who stocks shelves at Walgreens and is working toward being a stock broker. There should be a magical talisman involved (likely the chip he didn't gamble when he realized he had a gambling problem, keeping this $1 casino chip as a reminder) which he now keeps in his pocket. He is unbelievably lucky now, precisely because he no longer gambles. He is never, ever wrong with a stock tip, provided he receives no gain whatsoever from it. If he has any skin in the game, he is always dead wrong.

It is titled "Stock Boy."
I have a friend who could make this.

 
Okay, if you're going to write a script, it's going to be about a guy who stocks shelves at Walgreens and is working toward being a stock broker. There should be a magical talisman involved (likely the chip he didn't gamble when he realized he had a gambling problem, keeping this $1 casino chip as a reminder) which he now keeps in his pocket. He is unbelievably lucky now, precisely because he no longer gambles. He is never, ever wrong with a stock tip, provided he receives no gain whatsoever from it. If he has any skin in the game, he is always dead wrong.

It is titled "Stock Boy."
I have a friend who could make this.
I expect credit, a percentage, and a very attractive prostitute.I have several other ideas for your friend.

 
Tell your friend I can have a full story idea by Thursday, but the actual script must be written by Richard Lagrevenese

 
SCENE 11: Glenn's Mother's Basement

+Glenn smoke dope

+Lucmar and Bridgette exchange turns playing Crash Bandicoot

+ Nothing happens

+Lucmar and Bridgette leave together

 
Okay, if you're going to write a script, it's going to be about a guy who stocks shelves at Walgreens and is working toward being a stock broker. There should be a magical talisman involved (likely the chip he didn't gamble when he realized he had a gambling problem, keeping this $1 casino chip as a reminder) which he now keeps in his pocket. He is unbelievably lucky now, precisely because he no longer gambles. He is never, ever wrong with a stock tip, provided he receives no gain whatsoever from it. If he has any skin in the game, he is always dead wrong.

It is titled "Stock Boy."
Title it Hard Delete and you will have a winner.

 
Based on how big this True Detective has been, you might want to think about casting a couple big name movie stars. I would pencil in Jennifer Lawrence as Amber Andrews and Denzel Washington as Lucmar.

 

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