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Critique my resume. (1 Viewer)

Take education out of objectives, clean up bullets so they are consistent. I don't like grey tones. I prefer reading about experience more in paragraph form with emphasis on accomplishments. For example, for my resume:

President of a Geological Services company (a Nevada S-Corporation) that provides exploration, project management and Mexican corporate management services to a select group of clients.  The firm specializes in Mexico.  The company  manages eight projects and the corporate affairs of two Mexican companies.  Projects range in scope from generative exploration to advanced drilling stage programs.  The companies also have ties to legal, permitting and accounting subcontractors. The companies helped to found three Canadian public corporations. We have also founded six Mexican corporations for clients and one Nevada C-Corp. 
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Doesn't add up.  I see 8 yrs customer service, but only 4 yrs of work.  Are you skipping the time spent at the McDonald's register?  3 yrs of management...I am not really seeing any true management positions

 
Galileo said:
Doesn't add up.  I see 8 yrs customer service, but only 4 yrs of work.  Are you skipping the time spent at the McDonald's register?  3 yrs of management...I am not really seeing any true management positions
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I think he is equating supervision with management, but you are right. Experience doesn't add up to what is in summary.

 
I suck at grammar so take this with a grain of salt, but reads like someone attempting to display a mastery of grammar when they suck at it.

Looking to leverage my knowledge and experience into a long term career in this company.

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[SIZE=12pt]Bs meter goes off in the first paragraph.  Change in this company to something like with an industry leading (or innovative, etc.) financial company.[/SIZE]

 
Walking Boot said:
Inconsistent bullet points and spacing show a lack of attention to detail.

Too many descriptions for the jobs listed; makes it look like you're filling out the page to mask the lack of experience. I'd rather see six jobs with two descriptors each rather than two with six each.

Instant reject. Placed in the circular file without hesitation.
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I thought I had the spacing and bullets down pat. Those things are tough to get right in Microsoft Word.

I'm only 24, for the past 4 years I've been at Walgeens, the Bank, and Olive Garden as a server. I would think slimming my descriptions of those two jobs up and adding Olive Garden would hurt my resume, no?

What would I have to do to get an interview with you for a ####ty $15.00 an hour job, resume-wise? 

 
bueno said:
Take education out of objectives, clean up bullets so they are consistent. I don't like grey tones. I prefer reading about experience more in paragraph form with emphasis on accomplishments. For example, for my resume:
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Thanks, will take these suggestions into consideration during my revision.

 
Eminence said:
I thought I had the spacing and bullets down pat. Those things are tough to get right in Microsoft Word.

I'm only 24, for the past 4 years I've been at Walgeens, the Bank, and Olive Garden as a server. I would think slimming my descriptions of those two jobs up and adding Olive Garden would hurt my resume, no?

What would I have to do to get an interview with you for a ####ty $15.00 an hour job, resume-wise? 
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Let's face it - your experience is entry-level. The one page is fine, if cleaned up better. I would add Olive Garden simply to show continuous employment. Shift supervisor - stress leadership role.

 
Galileo said:
Doesn't add up.  I see 8 yrs customer service, but only 4 yrs of work.  Are you skipping the time spent at the McDonald's register?  3 yrs of management...I am not really seeing any true management positions
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Well, yeah.

McDonalds

Aurelios

Sodexo

Olive Garden

Walgreens

Fifth Third Bank

I don't know how relevant all those other jobs are. Timeline starts from me being 16 - 24. How would you have me rephrase management?

 
Eminence said:
Yeah, but I hate that website. I should probably update my profile there.
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There is a FBG group on linkedin.

ETA: Don'y hate on the site, it can provide great leads and the ability to keep up with old coworkers who can hook you up 10 years later.

 
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BassNBrew said:
I suck at grammar so take this with a grain of salt, but reads like someone attempting to display a mastery of grammar when they suck at it.

Looking to leverage my knowledge and experience into a long term career in this company.

[SIZE=12pt]Bs meter goes off in the first paragraph.  Change in this company to something like with an industry leading (or innovative, etc.) financial company.[/SIZE]
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Affirmative, will make that change.

 
bueno said:
Let's face it - your experience is entry-level. The one page is fine, if cleaned up better. I would add Olive Garden simply to show continuous employment. Shift supervisor - stress leadership role.
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Agreed, thank you for your feedback.

Will add Olive Garden and add further emphasis on leadership role.

 
Eminence said:
Lol, that's awesome! I've always liked Manteno. Dated a chick from there, quiet little town.

1/2 white trash, 1/2 class. 100% racist.
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It's amazing how much it's changed (at least buildings and roads wise) from when I lived there..  Anyways what kind of job are you trying to get?  I'd express that in your intro paragraph.  The formatting is definitely terrible but overall the content is not bad.   You'd only want to include relevant work experience, if you are kind of looking for anything then I'd make one resume with all of your experience and edit it down based on where you are sending it, keeping it at one page.

You also need a good cover letter.  

 
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tone1oc said:
It's amazing how much it's changed (at least buildings and roads wise) from when I lived there..  Anyways what kind of job are you trying to get?  I'd express that in your intro paragraph.  The formatting is definitely terrible but overall the content is not bad.   You'd only want to include relevant work experience, if you are kind of looking for anything then I'd make one resume with all of your experience and edit it down based on where you are sending it, keeping it at one page.

You also need a good cover letter.  
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I'm not really picky at this point, my floor is going to be $12.00 an hour. Was making $11.75 at Walgreens and $13.50 at the bank so anything below that would be a disgrace.

I'd like to run the books somewhere, I feel like it'd be nice to get some actual accounting experience on my resume.

With that in mind, anything in the financial field where I can sit at a desk all day would be fantastic. Not picky, just need something to pay the bills while I'm in school.

Cover letter, eh?

 
Walking Boot said:
I don't know man, my industry doesn't use resumes. But I don't need to see seven sentences to tell me what a clerk at Walgreens does.
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Interesting but it's not a Walgreens Clerk, I was a shift lead damnit.

I deal with the ####### customers so the engineers don't have to. I have people skills; I am good at dealing with people! Can't you understand that? What the hell is wrong with you people?

 
Cliff Clavin said:
Step 1: PDF. Not word. Word formatting can get destroyed by opening in something other than word. Save as a PDF.
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I'm thinking that's the case why some said the formatting was all wonky. I should have figured though, when I worked for the bank the recruiter rehashed my resume and sent it as a PDF.

Thanks for the heads up!

 
Anybody that opens a document from Eminence or Toneloc deserves to get doxxed or hacked. Hopefully none of you guys are falling for this phishing bull####.

 
Gucci Fur said:
Anybody that opens a document from Eminence or Toneloc deserves to get doxxed or hacked. Hopefully none of you guys are falling for this phishing bull####.
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:tinfoilhat:

I'm only helping Em out in here, no need for anyone else to open.  

 
Cliff Clavin said:
Step 1: PDF. Not word. Word formatting can get destroyed by opening in something other than word. Save as a PDF.
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Unless you're sending to a recruiting company (e.g. Robert Half).  In that case, their automated systems will process a Word document better.

 
Jobber said:
There is a FBG group on linkedin.

ETA: Don'y hate on the site, it can provide great leads and the ability to keep up with old coworkers who can hook you up 10 years later.
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There's an Fbg group on LinkedIn? Just look up Fbg?

 
bananafish said:
Write a cover letter and make both it and your resume company-specific. Also, if you can find the name of the person who will be reading them address the letter to that person. Spending a few minutes trying to find companies that you are interested in as well as fit your skill set and catering your resume (and interview if you get that far) to them is a better idea than just blanketing the town with generic resumes.

Keep in mind that the person reading it will most likely spend less than a minute and will have a keen eye for highfalutin BS so keep it snappy and not obviously embellished.
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I applied to about 10/12 jobs yesterday, I used a cover letter for 3-4 of them. I didn't address a single person by name and simply by reading you post it, I understand how much more of an impact that could have made. I'm giving you proof that I'm courteous and detail oriented in my cover letter itself.

 
Rich Conway said:
Unless you're sending to a recruiting company (e.g. Robert Half).  In that case, their automated systems will process a Word document better.
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The big body shops & headhunters who use resume scanners can read most anything... Converting PDF to text is not a big deal.  Which is fine for entry & mid level positions where its too expensive to have the first cut done by a human.

 
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Guys! I can't find a job! I'm gonna recede infinitely into debt, get my fingers broken, and slink into depression.

Stupid crap job market in Florida.

 
Did you leave on good terms with Walgreens or Fifth Third?

Can you wait tables?

 
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Eminence said:
Guys! I can't find a job! I'm gonna recede infinitely into debt, get my fingers broken, and slink into depression.

Stupid crap job market in Florida.
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Where have you applied?  
Have you sent any follow up emails or phone calls?
Which area are you in?

 
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