Need some advice for writing my novel (1 Viewer)

[Deputy67]

The only thing over the top is your disgusting and unwarranted treatment of others.

You are a sociopath, a moral monstrocity, the embodiment of the void from which such ilk is spawned. You wear a veil of normalcy among the true living, a mask of humanity hiding the black, glassy eyes of the shark.

By day you stroll among a society unaware of your foulness. By night you skulk here where you can hide, anonymously, like the poisonous viper coiled in his den.

Inside you are empty. A heart shrouded by a polluted mind. A deep rooted ugliness you dare not wear bravely, for you display cowardice like the jackal striking from the safety of the night. A pillar of all that is gnarled and misshapen in man's genetic code.

You are nothing..........a boil on the buttocks of civilization, destined to burst and ooze, a smear on a tissue flushed down the toilet where you belong.

The stain. Only the stain

And yet I have a job, a house, a loving family, friends,etc. I'm sorry, Unemployed guy that lives in a halfway house says what?

 

[bluemagic]

The only thing over the top is your disgusting and unwarranted treatment of others.

You are a sociopath, a moral monstrocity, the embodiment of the void from which such ilk is spawned. You wear a veil of normalcy among the true living, a mask of humanity hiding the black, glassy eyes of the shark.

By day you stroll among a society unaware of your foulness. By night you skulk here where you can hide, anonymously, like the poisonous viper coiled in his den.

Inside you are empty. A heart shrouded by a polluted mind. A deep rooted ugliness you dare not wear bravely, for you display cowardice like the jackal striking from the safety of the night. A pillar of all that is gnarled and misshapen in man's genetic code.

You are nothing..........a boil on the buttocks of civilization, destined to burst and ooze, a smear on a tissue flushed down the toilet where you belong.

The stain. Only the stain

And yet I have a job, a house, a loving family, friends,etc.I'm sorry, Unemployed guy that lives in a halfway house says what?

You do know MC Gas Huffer needs none of those things to be happy, right? Just ask him, he'll tell you...over and over again.

 

[fred_1_15301]

The only thing over the top is your disgusting and unwarranted treatment of others.

You are a sociopath, a moral monstrocity, the embodiment of the void from which such ilk is spawned. You wear a veil of normalcy among the true living, a mask of humanity hiding the black, glassy eyes of the shark.

By day you stroll among a society unaware of your foulness. By night you skulk here where you can hide, anonymously, like the poisonous viper coiled in his den.

Inside you are empty. A heart shrouded by a polluted mind. A deep rooted ugliness you dare not wear bravely, for you display cowardice like the jackal striking from the safety of the night. A pillar of all that is gnarled and misshapen in man's genetic code.

You are nothing..........a boil on the buttocks of civilization, destined to burst and ooze, a smear on a tissue flushed down the toilet where you belong.

The stain. Only the stain

And yet I have a job, a house, a loving family, friends,etc.I'm sorry, Unemployed guy that lives in a halfway house says what?

Did he get that from a book or movie?

 

[bluemagic]

The only thing over the top is your disgusting and unwarranted treatment of others.

You are a sociopath, a moral monstrocity, the embodiment of the void from which such ilk is spawned. You wear a veil of normalcy among the true living, a mask of humanity hiding the black, glassy eyes of the shark.

By day you stroll among a society unaware of your foulness. By night you skulk here where you can hide, anonymously, like the poisonous viper coiled in his den.

Inside you are empty. A heart shrouded by a polluted mind. A deep rooted ugliness you dare not wear bravely, for you display cowardice like the jackal striking from the safety of the night. A pillar of all that is gnarled and misshapen in man's genetic code.

You are nothing..........a boil on the buttocks of civilization, destined to burst and ooze, a smear on a tissue flushed down the toilet where you belong.

The stain. Only the stain

And yet I have a job, a house, a loving family, friends,etc.I'm sorry, Unemployed guy that lives in a halfway house says what?

Did he get that from a book or movie?

Could be a black metal song he wrote. He does have the greatest black metal voice in the world. Just ask him...

 

[fantasycurse42]

The only thing over the top is your disgusting and unwarranted treatment of others.

You are a sociopath, a moral monstrocity, the embodiment of the void from which such ilk is spawned. You wear a veil of normalcy among the true living, a mask of humanity hiding the black, glassy eyes of the shark.

By day you stroll among a society unaware of your foulness. By night you skulk here where you can hide, anonymously, like the poisonous viper coiled in his den.

Inside you are empty. A heart shrouded by a polluted mind. A deep rooted ugliness you dare not wear bravely, for you display cowardice like the jackal striking from the safety of the night. A pillar of all that is gnarled and misshapen in man's genetic code.

You are nothing..........a boil on the buttocks of civilization, destined to burst and ooze, a smear on a tissue flushed down the toilet where you belong.

The stain. Only the stain

And yet I have a job, a house, a loving family, friends,etc.I'm sorry, Unemployed guy that lives in a halfway house says what?

Did he get that from a book or movie?

It's the epilogue.

 

[timschochet]

The only thing over the top is your disgusting and unwarranted treatment of others.

You are a sociopath, a moral monstrocity, the embodiment of the void from which such ilk is spawned. You wear a veil of normalcy among the true living, a mask of humanity hiding the black, glassy eyes of the shark.

By day you stroll among a society unaware of your foulness. By night you skulk here where you can hide, anonymously, like the poisonous viper coiled in his den.

Inside you are empty. A heart shrouded by a polluted mind. A deep rooted ugliness you dare not wear bravely, for you display cowardice like the jackal striking from the safety of the night. A pillar of all that is gnarled and misshapen in man's genetic code.

You are nothing..........a boil on the buttocks of civilization, destined to burst and ooze, a smear on a tissue flushed down the toilet where you belong.

The stain. Only the stain

And yet I have a job, a house, a loving family, friends,etc.

Obviously your friends and family are unaware of your foulness.

 

[pantagrapher]

The hell is going on in here?

 

[bluemagic]

So far his book has a waiter, black metal singer, chef, FDNY top recruit, vagrant and door to door flyer hander outer.

I have my money on the vagrant being the hero that saves the world through minimal effort and high IQ.

 

[Deputy67]

The only thing over the top is your disgusting and unwarranted treatment of others.

You are a sociopath, a moral monstrocity, the embodiment of the void from which such ilk is spawned. You wear a veil of normalcy among the true living, a mask of humanity hiding the black, glassy eyes of the shark.

By day you stroll among a society unaware of your foulness. By night you skulk here where you can hide, anonymously, like the poisonous viper coiled in his den.

Inside you are empty. A heart shrouded by a polluted mind. A deep rooted ugliness you dare not wear bravely, for you display cowardice like the jackal striking from the safety of the night. A pillar of all that is gnarled and misshapen in man's genetic code.

You are nothing..........a boil on the buttocks of civilization, destined to burst and ooze, a smear on a tissue flushed down the toilet where you belong.

The stain. Only the stain

And yet I have a job, a house, a loving family, friends,etc.

Obviously your friends and family are unaware of your foulness.

I shower regularly and use a good antiperspirant. It seems to be working.

 

[Deputy67]

So far his book has a waiter, black metal singer, chef, FDNY top recruit, vagrant and door to door flyer hander outer.

I have my money on the vagrant being the hero that saves the world through minimal effort and high IQ.

You forgot the sensitive telemarketer that was trying to rip off the elderly by selling them worthless coins.

 

[SeaDogStat]

Whoa, they even have mods over there. Time out given for one liner making fun of someone's Dynasty team.

Did they say they liked ebola better than their dynasty team?

:reported:

 

[bluemagic]

So far his book has a waiter, black metal singer, chef, FDNY top recruit, vagrant and door to door flyer hander outer.

I have my money on the vagrant being the hero that saves the world through minimal effort and high IQ.

You forgot the sensitive telemarketer that was trying to rip off the elderly by selling them worthless coins.

It's starting to sound like Real Housewives of the Bronx.

 

[trogg78]

So far his book has a waiter, black metal singer, chef, FDNY top recruit, vagrant and door to door flyer hander outer.

I have my money on the vagrant being the hero that saves the world through minimal effort and high IQ.

You forgot the sensitive telemarketer that was trying to rip off the elderly by selling them worthless coins.

He has a CDL too. Does that make him a professional driver?

 

[bluemagic]

So far his book has a waiter, black metal singer, chef, FDNY top recruit, vagrant and door to door flyer hander outer.

I have my money on the vagrant being the hero that saves the world through minimal effort and high IQ.

You forgot the sensitive telemarketer that was trying to rip off the elderly by selling them worthless coins.

He has a CDL too. Does that make him a professional driver?

Sure. He's fairly liberal about job titles.

 

[Gordang]

this guy clearly has mental issues, he is out of line but so are all of you for toying with someone so mentally ######ed

 

[fred_1_15301]

this guy clearly has mental issues, he is out of line but so are all of you for toying with someone so mentally ######ed

Unless it's all one gigantic fishing trip. I actually like MC and his character but I'm getting more and more convinced that he's toying with us

 

[tonydead]

The only thing over the top is your disgusting and unwarranted treatment of others.

You are a sociopath, a moral monstrocity, the embodiment of the void from which such ilk is spawned. You wear a veil of normalcy among the true living, a mask of humanity hiding the black, glassy eyes of the shark.

By day you stroll among a society unaware of your foulness. By night you skulk here where you can hide, anonymously, like the poisonous viper coiled in his den.

Inside you are empty. A heart shrouded by a polluted mind. A deep rooted ugliness you dare not wear bravely, for you display cowardice like the jackal striking from the safety of the night. A pillar of all that is gnarled and misshapen in man's genetic code.

You are nothing..........a boil on the buttocks of civilization, destined to burst and ooze, a smear on a tissue flushed down the toilet where you belong.

The stain. Only the stain

And yet I have a job, a house, a loving family, friends,etc.I'm sorry, Unemployed guy that lives in a halfway house says what?

Did he get that from a book or movie?

True Detective maybe?

 

[McGarnicle]

this guy clearly has mental issues, he is out of line but so are all of you for toying with someone so mentally ######ed

Unless it's all one gigantic fishing trip. I actually like MC and his character but I'm getting more and more convinced that he's toying with us

Ditto, except I've hated it all from day 1 and I've never doubted he's been ####### with us the whole time.

 

[Deputy67]

The only thing over the top is your disgusting and unwarranted treatment of others.

You are a sociopath, a moral monstrocity, the embodiment of the void from which such ilk is spawned. You wear a veil of normalcy among the true living, a mask of humanity hiding the black, glassy eyes of the shark.

By day you stroll among a society unaware of your foulness. By night you skulk here where you can hide, anonymously, like the poisonous viper coiled in his den.

Inside you are empty. A heart shrouded by a polluted mind. A deep rooted ugliness you dare not wear bravely, for you display cowardice like the jackal striking from the safety of the night. A pillar of all that is gnarled and misshapen in man's genetic code.

You are nothing..........a boil on the buttocks of civilization, destined to burst and ooze, a smear on a tissue flushed down the toilet where you belong.

The stain. Only the stain

This is obviously a perfectly normal response to my post.

 

[johnnycakes]

The only thing over the top is your disgusting and unwarranted treatment of others.

You are a sociopath, a moral monstrocity, the embodiment of the void from which such ilk is spawned. You wear a veil of normalcy among the true living, a mask of humanity hiding the black, glassy eyes of the shark.

By day you stroll among a society unaware of your foulness. By night you skulk here where you can hide, anonymously, like the poisonous viper coiled in his den.

Inside you are empty. A heart shrouded by a polluted mind. A deep rooted ugliness you dare not wear bravely, for you display cowardice like the jackal striking from the safety of the night. A pillar of all that is gnarled and misshapen in man's genetic code.

You are nothing..........a boil on the buttocks of civilization, destined to burst and ooze, a smear on a tissue flushed down the toilet where you belong.

The stain. Only the stain

This is obviously a perfectly normal response to my post.

You're the Boston Strangler?

 

[fantasycurse42]

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=YXZ3yUZTlrA

 

[TenTimes]

this guy clearly has mental issues, he is out of line but so are all of you for toying with someone so mentally ######ed

Unless it's all one gigantic fishing trip. I actually like MC and his character but I'm getting more and more convinced that he's toying with us

This is about where I am. Really hope it's not all a fishing trip, because that'd be pretty low, so here I am hoping a guy legitimately has mental issues, which makes me feel like an #######.

 

[McGarnicle]

this guy clearly has mental issues, he is out of line but so are all of you for toying with someone so mentally ######ed

Unless it's all one gigantic fishing trip. I actually like MC and his character but I'm getting more and more convinced that he's toying with us

This is about where I am. Really hope it's not all a fishing trip, because that'd be pretty low, so here I am hoping a guy legitimately has mental issues, which makes me feel like an #######.

Who the #### cares, really. Every 3rd person you meet is screwed up in the head one way or another. He makes the FFA suck balls when he posts nonstop. It would be a lot better if he just left.

 

[TenTimes]

this guy clearly has mental issues, he is out of line but so are all of you for toying with someone so mentally ######ed

Unless it's all one gigantic fishing trip. I actually like MC and his character but I'm getting more and more convinced that he's toying with us

This is about where I am. Really hope it's not all a fishing trip, because that'd be pretty low, so here I am hoping a guy legitimately has mental issues, which makes me feel like an #######.

Who the #### cares, really. Every 3rd person you meet is screwed up in the head one way or another. He makes the FFA suck balls when he posts nonstop. It would be a lot better if he just left.

I was raised by a clinically depressed mother, so I do

 

[McGarnicle]

this guy clearly has mental issues, he is out of line but so are all of you for toying with someone so mentally ######ed

Unless it's all one gigantic fishing trip. I actually like MC and his character but I'm getting more and more convinced that he's toying with us

This is about where I am. Really hope it's not all a fishing trip, because that'd be pretty low, so here I am hoping a guy legitimately has mental issues, which makes me feel like an #######.

Who the #### cares, really. Every 3rd person you meet is screwed up in the head one way or another. He makes the FFA suck balls when he posts nonstop. It would be a lot better if he just left.

I was raised by a clinically depressed mother, so I do

Sorry to hear that, but I don't get how it pertains to the issue at hand.

 

[TenTimes]

this guy clearly has mental issues, he is out of line but so are all of you for toying with someone so mentally ######ed

Unless it's all one gigantic fishing trip. I actually like MC and his character but I'm getting more and more convinced that he's toying with us

This is about where I am. Really hope it's not all a fishing trip, because that'd be pretty low, so here I am hoping a guy legitimately has mental issues, which makes me feel like an #######.

Who the #### cares, really. Every 3rd person you meet is screwed up in the head one way or another. He makes the FFA suck balls when he posts nonstop. It would be a lot better if he just left.

I was raised by a clinically depressed mother, so I do

Sorry to hear that, but I don't get how it pertains to the issue at hand.

Whereas the alleged fishing trip may annoy you or others, it offends me. Are you offended by all this?

 

[McGarnicle]

this guy clearly has mental issues, he is out of line but so are all of you for toying with someone so mentally ######ed

Unless it's all one gigantic fishing trip. I actually like MC and his character but I'm getting more and more convinced that he's toying with us

This is about where I am. Really hope it's not all a fishing trip, because that'd be pretty low, so here I am hoping a guy legitimately has mental issues, which makes me feel like an #######.

Who the #### cares, really. Every 3rd person you meet is screwed up in the head one way or another. He makes the FFA suck balls when he posts nonstop. It would be a lot better if he just left.

I was raised by a clinically depressed mother, so I do

Sorry to hear that, but I don't get how it pertains to the issue at hand.

Whereas the alleged fishing trip may annoy you or others, it offends me. Are you offended by all this?

We completely talked past each other. I was saying I don't care about his mental issues, I just want him gone. I get what you're saying now, and I don't think the mental issues are made up per se. He's clearly a whackjob and a compulsive liar, and likely using hard drugs as well.